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{Strolling down the midway of Cedar Point}, I saw many interesting sights and sounds. There were children along with older people alike. {Looking dangerous from below}, the monstrous rides are actually very safe. {Filling the air}, the smell of concession stand ....

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.... to eat. So we went into a pizza place and ate. After dinner we went on all our favorite rides. As we were walking around all of our friends were asking us if we rode Demon Drop. Instead of getting ridiculed the whole way home, we decided to ride it. We had just enough time. {Strapping us in} my heart started pounding. As we slowly lifted off the ground it started to beat harder. I could see far out over Lake Erie as we steadily rose to the top. It was like time was standing still when we reached our climax at the top. Then we dropped at sixty-five miles per hour. I was glad I faced my mammoth fear. As we walked to the bus we were all ....